“Well dang it all, Dave. We can’t just keep floatin’ around in this contraption forever, can we?”
“No, I reckon we can’t Jeb. But you just take them binoculars and take a real good look see down below. Now, do it look like all them folks down there has decided to stop tryin’ to eat each other yet?”
“Naw, Dave. Don’t look like nothin’ of the sort. Hell, they look a mite more riled up than yesterday.”
“Yep. So, while we may not be able to stay up here forever I do reckon a little while longer do seem prudent.”
Nice one. Lighthearted with a wee tinge of social critique ;)
ReplyDeletemine: http://writersclubkl.wordpress.com/2012/06/08/friday-fictioneer-spread-your-wings-and-fly/
Loved the dialect. Sounds like they entertained some common sense. Good job!
ReplyDeletemine: http://www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html
ZOMBIES. Fabulous job - and the dialect was well handled. http://kaitlinandmichaelbranch.com/2012/06/08/friday-fictioneers-6/
ReplyDeleteI think I'd stay up in the air, too. Fun piece.
ReplyDeletemine is here: www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/06/wings.html
Nice take! I can relate on a few levels.....
ReplyDeletePretty funny take on that innocent blimp floating around in the nice blue sky. You have certainly populated the planet and the blimp with some pretty unattractive folks. But, stupid as they seem, the blimp folk do get our sympathies and I hope you let them float a mite longer, at least until the ground folk finish their dinners.
ReplyDeleteYours as ever,
Laura
and here I am again:
http://fictionvictimtoo.blogspot.com
Floating secure above a Zombie Cannibal Hell! The blimp should be named General Lee, after the Dukes of Hazzard car, flying through the air, as it often did, forever.
ReplyDeleteI love me a good zombie story! Nicely done!!! Here's mine: http://theforgottenwife.com/2012/06/07/friday-fictioneers-6812/
ReplyDeleteA good and funny take on the prompt. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/06/08/fridayfictioneers-emily/
ReplyDeleteoops. Zombies uh. Good one. Had to LOL after the line ,"...do it look like all them folks down there has decided to stop tryin’ to eat each other yet?”
ReplyDeleteWell, that blimp is taking them down at some point. Hopefully they don't get eaten too...
In the meantime, shall we go up? : http://niftitalks.com/2012/06/08/up/
LOL, I had a good giggle at this one. I think they are better off staying up in their balloon!
ReplyDeleteI'm over here:
http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/06/08/friday-fiction-blimps-and-balloons/
That was very funny! I had a good chuckle. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteI love the dialog, and the old dang-it flavor of the conversation. I'd hang in the sky over a visit to the local cannibals myself!
ReplyDeletecheers,
Laura
http://www.westcoastwriters.blogspot.com/2012/06/friday-fictioneers-above-clouds.html
Funny dialogue. I like the southern accent.
ReplyDeleteI wonder how long they'll stay up there.
Here's mine: http://logo-ligi.com/2012/06/08/radiant-flight/
The air is definitely the place to be when things are not quite right with society. Excellent way of looking at the prompt. :-)
ReplyDeleteDear Jeffrey,
ReplyDeleteA great story with one too many 'do's' in the last paragraph. Was it me, i'd 86 the first one. Dialect and twang in your voices are perfect and the chaos below is ominous and, from the sounds of it, carnivorous. Lovely stuff. i'd stay up, like a wrinkled and barely floating party balloon, until I couldn't anymore.
Aloha,
Doug
http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/06/08/joining-a-murmuration-or-bud-cowarts-view/